Aug
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kal el NANDO asked:
Hi again! Here is the last part of my writing. Can anybody tell me if there is a mistake if this little writing made for me…tomorrow i have to present it. so i am looking for any mistake. thanks again.
Hi again! Here is the last part of my writing. Can anybody tell me if there is a mistake if this little writing made for me…tomorrow i have to present it. so i am looking for any mistake. thanks again.
The club is situated between the coast and the mountains. For this reason, activities as rock climbing, mountain biking, hill walking among other sports can be practiced by young people. Similarly, the club is organizing three activities near the coast such as windsurfing, body board and surfing.
Conclusion
I highly recommend you joining to the club. Young people would find that adventures sports are an interesting and healthy way to spend free times. Likewise, the activities would also help you to become fitter.
I would delete “activities as” in the second sentence. It gives more clarity and reduces wordiness.
Again in the third sentence, I would delete “three activities” and move “near the coast” at the end for improved clarity.
In the conclusion, remove the s from “free times” and I would say everything else is fine. Keep up the good work!
De club is gesitueerd tussen de kust en de bergen. Om deze reden, kunnen de activiteiten zoals bergbeklimming, berg het biking, heuvel het lopen en verschillende andere sporten door jonge mensen worden uitgeoefend. Op dezelfde manier organiseert de club drie activiteiten dichtbij de kust die, het windsurfing, lichaamsraad en het surfen zijn.
Conclusie:
Ik adviseer u die hoogst een lid van deze club worden. De jonge mensen zouden vinden dat de avonturen en de sporten een interessante en gezonde manier zijn om hun tijd door te brengen. Eveneens, zouden de activiteiten u ook meer pasvorm helpen te worden.